SL News peer revision

I am the organizer of Sonny's news (sonny:writer, jessie: reader, susie: editor)

Cannot Afford a House in Real Life? Buy Land in Second Life and Build the House by Yourselves!

the dialogue is below:

[2010/05/04 19:11] Susie223 Chun: http://sonny5258.blogspot.com/2010/04/cannot-afford-house-in-real-life-buy.html

[2010/05/04 19:11] Ding Atolia: it's a link

[2010/05/04 19:11] Ding Atolia: sorry sonny5258.blogspot.com

[2010/05/04 19:11] Ding Atolia: my story is so short...

[2010/05/04 19:12] Jessie Passerine: i'll be the reader

[2010/05/04 19:12] Ding Atolia: i want to focus on the good sides about the land issue in sl

[2010/05/04 19:12] Ding Atolia: compared with reality

[2010/05/04 19:13] Susie223 Chun: Many middle-class people who have worked fiercely for about 20 years get shocked when seeing their dreams of buying a new house breaking down

[2010/05/04 19:13] Susie223 Chun: maybe break down?

[2010/05/04 19:14] Ding Atolia: but i don't think I have expressed what I intended to say

[2010/05/04 19:14] Ding Atolia: ok

[2010/05/04 19:14] Ding Atolia: and i am really lacking in the background information about the land in sl

[2010/05/04 19:15] Jessie Passerine: well , after reading the article. I think buying an house in second life does not actually helo the situation in reality[2010/05/04 19:15] Ding Atolia: so what are the aspects are you guys interested in land in sl or house?

[2010/05/04 19:15] Jessie Passerine: it just offerred an escape temporaly[2010/05/04 19:15] Ding Atolia: haha good point

[2010/05/04 19:15] Jessie Passerine: in reality you still cannot afford a house[2010/05/04 19:16] Ding Atolia: I think I can add it to my story

[2010/05/04 19:16] Jessie Passerine: haha XD

[2010/05/04 19:16] Ding Atolia: and change my focus

[2010/05/04 19:16] Ding Atolia: not just the good sides but bojectively[2010/05/04 19:17] Ding Atolia: ruby

[2010/05/04 19:17] Jessie Passerine: and the first time i saw the title, I thought it was an add from the game

[2010/05/04 19:17] Ding Atolia: do you know more about the house building thing in sl?

[2010/05/04 19:17] Susie223 Chun: haha

[2010/05/04 19:18] Susie223 Chun: actually it's a good way to escape from reality

[2010/05/04 19:18] Ruby Lysios: The past two decades has witnessed an ever-growing rate in the house price. i think the grammar is strange

[2010/05/04 19:19] Susie223 Chun: not only buying houses or lands, but also the whole game

[2010/05/04 19:19] Ruby Lysios: you might add the subject "we"

[2010/05/04 19:19] Susie223 Chun: it's not strange, I think

[2010/05/04 19:20] Ding Atolia: I think it's a sentence structure

[2010/05/04 19:20] Susie223 Chun: because I once saw a similar grammar in a film

[2010/05/04 19:20] Ruby Lysios: allright

[2010/05/04 19:21] Ruby Lysios: it is a retreat for people in real life; they might but a resort and take vacation there

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ruby Lysios: i want to make money

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ding Atolia: yeah

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ruby Lysios: could we pay mortage to buy house[2010/05/04 19:22] Ding Atolia: haha. i am also interested

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ding Atolia: probably not

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ruby Lysios: down payment

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ruby Lysios: really?

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ding Atolia: ...

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ding Atolia: i am not sure[2010/05/04 19:22] Ruby Lysios: maybe you could search

[2010/05/04 19:22] Ding Atolia: ha

[2010/05/04 19:23] Ding Atolia: ok

[2010/05/04 19:23] Ruby Lysios: and you could encourage everyone has his palace one day

[2010/05/04 19:24] Ding Atolia: haha we are all princesses

[2010/05/04 19:24] Susie223 Chun: I want to try decoration in SL,XD[2010/05/04 19:24] Ding Atolia: yeah i think i need to search these kinds of information more

[2010/05/04 19:24] Ding Atolia: and show them in my revision

[2010/05/04 19:24] Ruby Lysios: and you could also kick out the person that you don't want

[2010/05/04 19:25] Susie223 Chun: maybe you can interview some peole[2010/05/04 19:25] Ruby Lysios: become a master of the land

[2010/05/04 19:25] Jessie Passerine: haha~

[2010/05/04 19:25] Ding Atolia: yeah someone who has owned one[2010/05/04 19:25] Ding Atolia: just like the guy we just met

[2010/05/04 19:25] Ruby Lysios: yes! you could add them friends

[2010/05/04 19:25] Jessie Passerine: so ding~ how to build a house?[2010/05/04 19:25] Ding Atolia: who drove away

[2010/05/04 19:26] Susie223 Chun: it's not difficlut to find someone with excellent decoration

[2010/05/04 19:26] Ding Atolia: i think he is really into his land though he is so rude...

[2010/05/04 19:26] Ruby Lysios: maybe you could go shopping and buy some furniture

[2010/05/04 19:26] Ding Atolia: sorry, J, i am not sure either

[2010/05/04 19:27] Ding Atolia: i will search more

[2010/05/04 19:27] Ding Atolia: is there a second-hand store in sl[2010/05/04 19:27] Ding Atolia: i mean second-hand stores haha there must be some

[2010/05/04 19:28] Ding Atolia: so we can save money

[2010/05/04 19:28] Susie223 Chun: yes ,there should be

[2010/05/04 19:28] Ruby Lysios: but people may nor know if the thing is used[2010/05/04 19:28] Ruby Lysios: that makes no difference

[2010/05/04 19:28] Jessie Passerine: ok~ your essay aroused my curiosity in buying and building houses in sl. maybe you can add it in your story[2010/05/04 19:29] Jessie Passerine: some further information

[2010/05/04 19:29] Ruby Lysios: i expect to know too

[2010/05/04 19:29] Ding Atolia: you mean in sl, we cannot check an object-whether it's new or old

[2010/05/04 19:29] Ding Atolia: ?

[2010/05/04 19:29] Ding Atolia: ok, I will do it

[2010/05/04 19:29] Ruby Lysios: whether it's new or old makes no difference[2010/05/04 19:29] Susie223 Chun: yes, they are all virtua

l[2010/05/04 19:29] Ruby Lysios: people might not aware of that

[2010/05/04 19:29] Ding Atolia: ooooooh

[2010/05/04 19:30] Ding Atolia: so the second-hand stores are useless[2010/05/04 19:30] Ding Atolia: haha

[2010/05/04 19:31] Ding Atolia: maybe we should call it throw-away stores-things other people don't want anymore but useful to other people

[2010/05/04 19:31] Ding Atolia: not throw-away exactly haha

[2010/05/04 19:32] Ruby Lysios: and maybe you could sell the things you do not want and make money

[2010/05/04 19:32] Ding Atolia: yeah that's what I mean

[2010/05/04 19:32] Ding Atolia: so all advice taken and i will make more efforts ha

[2010/05/04 19:32] Susie223 Chun: I see your point

[2010/05/04 19:32] Ding Atolia: any other suggestions?

[2010/05/04 19:33] Susie223 Chun: no

[2010/05/04 19:33] Ruby Lysios: no

[2010/05/04 19:33] Ding Atolia: or can we take a break now or at 11:00

My comment:

We are all curious about how to make money and buy lands to become the master. This week we were kicked out by the fram owner next to Mortu. He was so rude...but it seemed a special experience in second life.

Buying a house in secold life could mean a escape for us. In real life, we couldn't afford to buy one. In second life, we might decorate and design the house by our own and get a sense of achievement.

Sonny is encouraged to interview the owners and ask how they make money and what they feel about that. This could add to her writing and compare people's feeling of those house owners in second life and reality.

SL G3 New Presentation

jessie is flying!!!

SL Lesson 2 peer revision

I am the organizer of Susie's newsBrought by a Draft Resolution
(Susie: the writer, Ding: the editor, Jessie: the reader)
1. the dialogue we discussed
[2010/03/23 19:32] Susie223 Chun: my story address
[2010/03/23 19:33] Susie223 Chun: who will be the reder,editor and og?
[2010/03/23 19:33] Ding Atolia: i am the editor
[2010/03/23 19:33] Susie223 Chun: ok
[2010/03/23 19:34] Susie223 Chun: so Ruby will be the reader?
[2010/03/23 19:34] Susie223 Chun: cos we should take different roles each time
[2010/03/23 19:34] Ruby Lysios: ok
[2010/03/23 19:34] Jessie Passerine: i'm the editor ding's the reader
[2010/03/23 19:34] Ruby Lysios: so i will be reader this time?
[2010/03/23 19:35] Ruby Lysios: or og\
[2010/03/23 19:35] Jessie Passerine: and ruby the or
[2010/03/23 19:35] Susie223 Chun: ok
[2010/03/23 19:35] Ruby Lysios: ok
[2010/03/23 19:35] Susie223 Chun: let's start
[2010/03/23 19:35] Ding Atolia: ok, i will be reader
[2010/03/23 19:35] Ding Atolia: and J is editor
[2010/03/23 19:36] Jessie Passerine: ok . there's a grammer mistake in p1
[2010/03/23 19:36] Susie223 Chun shouts: ?
[2010/03/23 19:37] Jessie Passerine: "said by " maybe dropping by would be more proper
[2010/03/23 19:37] Susie223 Chun: why is there a大喊?
[2010/03/23 19:38] Jessie Passerine: properer
[2010/03/23 19:39] Susie223 Chun: I don't think it's a grammar mistake...
[2010/03/23 19:39] Ding Atolia: maybe we use just said more common in report
[2010/03/23 19:40] Jessie Passerine: yes i meant that
[2010/03/23 19:41] Susie223 Chun: ok
[2010/03/23 19:41] Lucky Board: This prize wasn't claimed... so let's try a new magic letter.
[2010/03/23 19:41] Lucky Board: Next Prize: breeding coop
[2010/03/23 19:41] Lucky Board: Looking for a winner whose name begins with.... V.
[2010/03/23 19:42] Jessie Passerine: The document showed that the Taipei Municipal Government treated queers as epidemic virus, that’s why they were so angry.
[2010/03/23 19:42] Jessie Passerine: and that's why
[2010/03/23 19:43] Jessie Passerine: or the comma would be connecting two simple sentences
[2010/03/23 19:43] Susie223 Chun: ok
[2010/03/23 19:44] Susie223 Chun: why is the screen so dark?
[2010/03/23 19:44] Ding Atolia: i am wondering too
[2010/03/23 19:45] Susie223 Chun: any other miskates?
[2010/03/23 19:45] Susie223 Chun: 15minutes left
[2010/03/23 19:45] Ruby Lysios: world environment setting
[2010/03/23 19:46] Ruby Lysios: could be brighter
[2010/03/23 19:46] Susie223 Chun: got it
[2010/03/23 19:47] Jessie Passerine: I found the translation of 教育局 on the website of taipei government
[2010/03/23 19:47] Ding Atolia: as a reader, i get much information fro your story
[2010/03/23 19:48] Ding Atolia: from
[2010/03/23 19:48] Susie223 Chun: ?
[2010/03/23 19:48] Jessie Passerine: it's Departmnet of Education
[2010/03/23 19:48] Ding Atolia: it's pretty complete
[2010/03/23 19:49] Susie223 Chun: I thought department isn't for a city's government, but for a country
[2010/03/23 19:49] Susie223 Chun: well ,I see,thank you
[2010/03/23 19:51] Lucky Board: This prize wasn't claimed... so let's try a new magic letter.
[2010/03/23 19:51] Lucky Board: Next Prize: breeding coop
[2010/03/23 19:51] Lucky Board: Looking for a winner whose name begins with.... B.
[2010/03/23 19:52] Jessie Passerine: what about the term " New York City Department of Education"
[2010/03/23 19:53] Jessie Passerine: It's also for a city
[2010/03/23 19:53] Susie223 Chun: ok
[2010/03/23 19:55] Susie223 Chun: 5 minutes left
[2010/03/23 19:55] Ruby Lysios: well...
[2010/03/23 19:56] Susie223 Chun: Ruby?any opinions?
[2010/03/23 19:57] Jessie Passerine: In the next school year, relational content will appear in the textbooks. I think using the word relevant instead of relaional will be better.
[2010/03/23 19:59] Ruby Lysios: i think what you wite is very objective and without your personal feeling
[2010/03/23 19:59] Ruby Lysios: that's good
[2010/03/23 19:59] Susie223 Chun: thanks

2.At first Jessie thought that maybe in paragraph 1 "The gender equality education in Taipei falls back to 15 years ago due to the official document which was delivered to every middle school in Taipei by Taipei Department of Education a few days ago, said Lai Youmei, the chief secretary of The Gender Equality Education Association." we could say dropping by instead of said by Lai Youmen, but after our discussion we think me might use the word "said" because it's more common in News report.

The sentence "The document showed that the Taipei Municipal Government treated queers as epidemic virus, that’s why they were so angry" should be "The document showed that the Taipei Municipal Government treated queers as epidemic virus, and that’s why they were so angry"

After the remonstrance, Kang Zonghu, the director of Taipei Department of Education...we don't need to add the word "Taipei" because it is not the organization under the city.

In the next school year, relational content will appear in the textbooks. Jessie thinks using the word relevant instead of relaional will be better.

3. I think the news article written by Susie gives us lots of information; what she wrote was very objective and without her personal feelings. The article was also quite well-organized and we could see and understand the basic background through each paragraph clearly about gender equality education.

SL Lesson 1 G3 DISCUSSION

News Title:

Ruby Sadness and Sorrow toward New Taiwan Brides; All They Need is Love and Care

Susie Brought by a Draft Resolution

Ding Taiwan Touches My Heart

Jessie Parent in Mailand searching for “Missing” child in Taiwan Online after earthquake

[2010/03/09 19:47] Susie223 Chun: so ,Ruby,what story did you write?[2010/03/09 19:47] Ruby Lysios: yes

[2010/03/09 19:47] Ruby Lysios: about belnuts girls

[2010/03/09 19:47] Ruby Lysios: can you say your topic again[2010/03/09 19:48] Susie223 Chun: I mean,a detailed story...[2010/03/09 19:48] Ruby Lysios: ?homesexual and....

[2010/03/09 19:48] Ding Atolia: she wants to hear the details[2010/03/09 19:48] Ding Atolia: haha

[2010/03/09 19:48] Susie223 Chun: many homosexual organizations gathered and protested in front of the Taipei Municipal Government.[2010/03/09 19:48] Susie223 Chun: and the government apologized[2010/03/09 19:49] Jessie Passerine: and what happened next?[2010/03/09 19:49] Ruby Lysios: the girl who sell belnuts to make a living and hope one day she could get into the university

[2010/03/09 19:49] Mi Shinn: if there is no question, then see you next week in class

[2010/03/09 19:49] Ruby Lysios: ok

[2010/03/09 19:49] Ding Atolia: Ok

[2010/03/09 19:50] Jessie Passerine: what should we do next?[2010/03/09 19:50] Ding Atolia: so now we have to post our story?[2010/03/09 19:50] Ruby Lysios: we should put our headlines in the blogger first?

[2010/03/09 19:50] Susie223 Chun: I think so

[2010/03/09 19:50] Ruby Lysios: i am quite sure, maybe i wull change another topic

[2010/03/09 19:50] Ding Atolia: I have put it in my own

[2010/03/09 19:51] Susie223 Chun: so did I

[2010/03/09 19:51] Ding Atolia: but i haven't been invited yet

[2010/03/09 19:51] Ruby Lysios: i will link to your blogger if i have time[2010/03/09 19:51] Susie223 Chun: how

[2010/03/09 19:51] Susie223 Chun: I

[2010/03/09 19:51] Ruby Lysios: really?

[2010/03/09 19:51] Susie223 Chun: I got one

[2010/03/09 19:51] Ruby Lysios: you should tell the teacher[2010/03/09 19:51] Ding Atolia: let me check first

[2010/03/09 19:51] Susie223 Chun: so youshould got one,too[2010/03/09 19:52] Ruby Lysios: yes

[2010/03/09 19:52] Ruby Lysios: this is my msn r2955@yahoo.com.tw you can add me

[2010/03/09 19:52] Susie223 Chun: er...what else should we do?[2010/03/09 19:53] Jessie Passerine: **11:00-12:00 Back to Motru1. Students will be divided into small groups and have discussions on the news stories that you have written.2. Take a group picture. Post it to the class blog.

[2010/03/09 19:53] Ruby Lysios: put the headline and our conversation in the personnal and class blog

[2010/03/09 19:53] Ding Atolia: let's take a picture[2010/03/09 19:53] Ruby Lysios: ok

[2010/03/09 19:53] Susie223 Chun: Let's take a picture now,shall we?[2010/03/09 19:54] Ruby Lysios: let laugh together

[2010/03/09 19:54] Susie223 Chun: fine

[2010/03/09 19:54] Ruby Lysios: stand a line or make a circle?[2010/03/09 19:54] Jessie Passerine: come here . the view is better here[2010/03/09 19:55] Susie223 Chun: line,I suppose

[2010/03/09 19:55] Jessie Passerine: in line

[2010/03/09 19:55] Jessie Passerine: ok

[2010/03/09 19:55] Ruby Lysios: come here

[2010/03/09 19:55] Jessie Passerine: sun?

[2010/03/09 19:56] Ding Atolia: wait a second

[2010/03/09 19:56] Ding Atolia: she is stuck

[2010/03/09 19:56] Ruby Lysios: haha

[2010/03/09 19:56] Ding Atolia: yeah, i'm invited

[2010/03/09 19:57] Jessie Passerine: wating for u~ sun

[2010/03/09 19:57] Jessie Passerine: haha~~

[2010/03/09 19:58] Mi Shinn: Hi Jessie

[2010/03/09 19:58] Jessie Passerine: hi

[2010/03/09 19:58] Susie223 Chun: god

[2010/03/09 19:58] Mi Shinn: could you send me a copy of the transcript?

[2010/03/09 19:58] Mi Shinn: I lost mine

[2010/03/09 19:58] Mi Shinn: maybe use the traditional c+p way[2010/03/09 19:59] Jessie Passerine: ok~

[2010/03/09 19:59] Mi Shinn: email me after class

[2010/03/09 19:59] Mi Shinn: thanks

[2010/03/09 19:59] Mi Shinn: see you
[2010/03/09 19:59] Jessie Passerine: see you~

[2010/03/09 19:59] Ding Atolia: see you

[2010/03/09 19:59] Susie223 Chun: see u~